eh? ok, so they should've used whilst instead of while when talking about the results of the search of his grandmother's house... but it doesn't really warrant being described as the raping of english.
The flow was terrible. I ended up having to re-read it 3 times to get the information out of the article. It kept jumping about the place with the details.
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Date: 2008-01-20 05:54 pm (UTC)still, he am a twart!
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Date: 2008-01-20 05:58 pm (UTC)